Wednesday Revision assignments for periods 1,2,3

Identify 10 passages/excerpts from your two different summary drafts so far (the Oliver, and Balzar summaries) that show the specific errors we've discussed.
Try to find at least 5 that show vague language, either ENPs or UQs, and try to figure out what actual, specific content you need to fix the vagueness.
Also especially look at choppy "chunks" of 2-4 short sentences that need to be combined into one or two.
Finally, don't forget paragraph openings that lack a complete main idea in your topic sentence.

When you've gathered ten such excerpts, paste them into a new document, then fix each one in a clear, well-written sentence. Please put the "good" ones right after the bad ones they replace, so that you alternate bad/good, bad/good, bad/good, etc.

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